Can someone honestly rate my essay?

Prestigious is a better word to use than top notch. Ethnicities, not ethnics. Keen on, not keen in. Learned, not learnt. In the last sentence, I think transform would be better than 'make me'. But this is your essay, not mine. It is well written, but you should probably go over it once more to check for any more mistakes or for any other ways to further augment your essay. I wish you the best of luck in this pursuit!